"And I will probably never mention Mpreg again, okay?"

HAHAHA NOT IN THIS FANDOM.

Having not read the original story, I can still spot the Hemmingway feel of it, and I enjoyed the way you combined that with the characters for the exaggerated effect. I like how you cast them as well, both so uncertain and Jack seeming more vulnerable (in some ways) at this moment. And the line "I'll shoot myself" has a Very Different meaning from him. Such an interesting piece. (~*Tranaaaansformative wooooorks*~)