"And I will probably never mention Mpreg again, okay?"
HAHAHA NOT IN THIS FANDOM.
Having not read the original story, I can still spot the Hemmingway feel of it, and I enjoyed the way you combined that with the characters for the exaggerated effect. I like how you cast them as well, both so uncertain and Jack seeming more vulnerable (in some ways) at this moment. And the line "I'll shoot myself" has a Very Different meaning from him. Such an interesting piece. (~*Tranaaaansformative wooooorks*~)
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Date: 2011-07-20 05:15 am (UTC)HAHAHA NOT IN THIS FANDOM.
Having not read the original story, I can still spot the Hemmingway feel of it, and I enjoyed the way you combined that with the characters for the exaggerated effect. I like how you cast them as well, both so uncertain and Jack seeming more vulnerable (in some ways) at this moment. And the line "I'll shoot myself" has a Very Different meaning from him. Such an interesting piece. (~*Tranaaaansformative wooooorks*~)